tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post2194610942494002556..comments2024-01-13T04:10:17.947-08:00Comments on Gilbert Curiosities: Blog Contest: Just how good is your character's voice?Marie Gilberthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07275544861810872122noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-65510912100014085342012-01-02T05:04:26.979-08:002012-01-02T05:04:26.979-08:00I want to read the rest of this story? Is there m...I want to read the rest of this story? Is there more? LucyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-81968477700413532902011-12-12T18:27:42.964-08:002011-12-12T18:27:42.964-08:00Sounds interesting I want to know what they are go...Sounds interesting I want to know what they are going to find. Please update soonStaceyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04106205783251024131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-61425477168399087602011-12-09T16:30:34.997-08:002011-12-09T16:30:34.997-08:00I'm thinking 22 since. It seems they have been...I'm thinking 22 since. It seems they have been away from the house for a while but are still holding on to some childhood memories. I really like the opening and want to find out what's behind the door!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03335427276116292574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-31978333268418976682011-12-09T11:10:07.574-08:002011-12-09T11:10:07.574-08:00I would guess her to be about 21.
And I agree wit...I would guess her to be about 21.<br /><br />And I agree with the other posters comments. Good luck! :)Stephaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17401931638397651614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-70614865738838857192011-12-09T10:10:13.111-08:002011-12-09T10:10:13.111-08:00I'm thinking 26 or so. Although I'm not s...I'm thinking 26 or so. Although I'm not sure which of the two is the MC. I thought Lucy, then I thought Michael, and now I'm just not sure....Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-64362091403898671122011-12-09T09:51:26.564-08:002011-12-09T09:51:26.564-08:00I'll go with 19? Curious to know why the close...I'll go with 19? Curious to know why the closet seems to have shrunk. ooh intriguing..Cecilia Roberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04416564789369523352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-75985122549415657452011-12-09T04:57:37.356-08:002011-12-09T04:57:37.356-08:00Thank you Jennifer. I appreciate your offer and wi...Thank you Jennifer. I appreciate your offer and will get together soon. Good guesses for everyone else.Marie Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07275544861810872122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-88299775089584757742011-12-09T02:48:25.232-08:002011-12-09T02:48:25.232-08:00I'd guess 25? I like the idea of a safe place...I'd guess 25? I like the idea of a safe place.<br />JuliaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-7414129948624320352011-12-08T20:09:28.814-08:002011-12-08T20:09:28.814-08:00I think I'm gonna go with...mid 20's? Mayb...I think I'm gonna go with...mid 20's? Maybe 25 or 26?S. L. Hennessyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06514651403542719387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-12589698710568892722011-12-08T18:48:59.571-08:002011-12-08T18:48:59.571-08:00Marie: I am guessing they are young if they are e...Marie: I am guessing they are young if they are even trying this. Probaby early to mid twenties.<br /><br />There are some things that need tweeking in this<br /><br />I'm seeing passive tence, POV switching, two different characters the "subject" of the same paragraph.<br /><br />It's nothing a good edit won't fix. Contact me if you'd like some help. They are easy fixes that you are probably reading right over because you are so close to your work. Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-25062021357777374492011-12-08T16:11:33.713-08:002011-12-08T16:11:33.713-08:00For Lucy and Michael I'm guessing early twenti...For Lucy and Michael I'm guessing early twenties, but there were some parts where I was confused as to who the narrator was. From the beginning and the end, I assumed it was Lucy. But then the line "Michael replied, a sick taste in his mouth" made me think it was actually Michael. Of course, you could just be using omniscient 3rd narration and this doesn't matter at all. ^_^Francesca Zappiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16876692064254806825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-70882396420491271412011-12-08T14:06:44.103-08:002011-12-08T14:06:44.103-08:00I'm guessing late 20'sI'm guessing late 20's1000th.monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8097856950972498758.post-56502252284515045472011-12-08T04:56:05.105-08:002011-12-08T04:56:05.105-08:00Hi Marie! I like this! Is it for a contest or is...Hi Marie! I like this! Is it for a contest or is it from one of your books? Very interesting!Fran@BCDChttp://brokencookiesdontcount.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com